Friday, 15 May 2015


On a cloudy night Jimmy heard the water  lapping on the shore.  He was camping in the forest.  He  was toasting sizzling marshmallows over the fire.

Suddenly he turned around then the monster was there. The monsters eyes turned googgley  and big, and his teeth were sharp.

Trying to defend  himself  Jimmy swung his  stick out like a sword. Suddenly  the  monster stretched  out his tongue and  snatched the marshmallow. The monster was scary

Jimmy was pretending  that the pillow was a marshmallow and then the Jimmy ran away from the Monster and  he screamed.   

1 comment:

  1. i enjoyed your story because it made had lots of detail to make your work even better you could try and add more speech. By Bethan